1.
In last paragraph, the two
questions are improper to put together, for first one is not finish completely,
I add another question after it.
2.
I should add more angle in last
paragraph so that it will be more interesting.
“In
the future. Whether IE can still occupy Taiwanese' heart? how it compete with
Google this powerful rival? users can look forward its improvement and enjoy
more convenient functions!”
3.
Grammar usage mistakes.
4.
This kind of article belong to
survey. So I should focus on analyzing the phenomenon instead of making story.
5.
Avoid to use “we” as subject.
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